Here is the first chapter from my Mini Book Project......Be warned though....It is not in my usual style of writing.
I will publish a chapter each Monday until you have read them all. I really hope you enjoy it as much as I did writing it and would love to hear your comments............Please be kind and remember these are mini chapters not full ones. xxx
Chapter 1.
The day
started innocently enough with the sun streaming through the window attempting
to wake the sleeping girl. Light beams reflected off of the bottles on her
dressing table and formed strange patterns on the ceiling. She awoke with a
yawn and a stretch and lay there for a while remembering where she was. Today
was going to be an interesting one that was for sure.
Her life
was unrecognisable from 2 years ago, and she thought about the past every day.
She looked at the calendar....24th September; this was the day 12 months ago
she should have been getting ready for the biggest, happiest day of her life.
She remembered looking at her dress hanging in front of her and the hustle
bustle of the others racing around downstairs.
She also
remembered that life changing moment when she heard the phone ringing. Her
mother had answered it and she heard the cheery "hello" change to a
gasp. Then footsteps, her mother’s footsteps slowly coming
upstairs. The door opened and the woman who had bought her into this world stared
at her in disbelief...."Catherine...I'm....I'm....so sorry......it's Greg....there's
been an accident". And in that moment her world had crashed around her ears.......................................
She
dragged her mind back to the present day the reality hit her like a door
slamming in the face. She swung her legs out of the bed the floor was cold and
she quickly pulled them up tucking them under her chin. She had to get going
and get ready, a busy day lay ahead. No more time for dwelling on the past today.
The
shower was hot and steamy and felt like a haven of peace as well as being like
a double espresso shock to the brain. The water ran over her body and she
winced as it touched a healing scar. As she
sat at the mirror looking at her reflection she came to the conclusion that she
liked herself better than she used to. She had changed beyond recognition and
that pleased her as well as making her feel secure.
Her
outfit had been chosen well and consisted of jeans and a polo neck. She had
decided on flat boots today in case she needed to run or issue a blow to the
ankles. The last part of her assemble was the most important, this accessory
had to be right. The door clicked open and the array of options stood in front
of her. "Hmmm" she said out loud “which
one shall I use today ?" It needed to be small enough to fit into her bag
but not so big that it drew any attention to her. The little black one was the obvious
option but it needed something else, “there" she said as she
found it “the perfect thing".
One last
look in the mirror, a quick adjustment to her hair and she slipped the gun and
silencer into her bag....
Gun and silencer! Now there's an accessory I wasn't expecting!!! Oh my word, how cool is that, Sam!
ReplyDeleteThe beginning felt nice, you know, that comfortable style of reading and I liked the way you gave an indirect feel for the room with your use of description, but then it moved into a completely different kind of story that was done so delicately and smoothly you hadn't realised it was coming until the very last sentence! That's very clever writing and you should be very proud of yourself! Blooming brilliant! :-) xxx
Thankyou so much Jess, that's such a compliment coming from a published author. xxxxxx
DeleteThis is great! Sucked me in from the start even though I had no time stayed on to read. Well done and congrats on being so brave too. You should share it on here also: http://carmelharrington.com/2013/05/12/thinking-of-writing-a-bestseller-then-read-on/
ReplyDeleteThankyou Kate, lovely comment. I will definitely pop on over and have a look at the website xxx
DeleteWow, that's good. Well done.
ReplyDeleteIf you need a free-lance proof-reader, I'd be more than happy to oblige.
Joy xx
Thank you Joy, I will certainly let you know if I need one xxx
DeleteI'm hooked. The hints throughout of what happened in her past that have lead her to this are teasing; I already want to read more. Love the similie of the double expresso. x
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading and leaving a comment Liz, Lots of love xx
DeleteOoo. Not a whodunnit but who's it going to be done to.
ReplyDeleteThink you have rumbled me. Thanks for reading xxx
DeleteReally enjoyed reading that - wasn't expecting the final line at all - nicely done! :o)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much. xx
DeleteOoh what a cliffhanger! Can't wait to read the next installment. I quite like the little 'snippets' as it leaves us wanting more.
ReplyDeleteThankyou for reading Suzanne xx
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ReplyDeleteWell done you ! I sort of had an idea of how this story would go from comments you'd made and you have put this beginning together beautifully x
And I know how scary sharing fiction can be-harder than r/l Blogging imho no two ways ! Keep it up xxx
Thankyou so much for reading. xxx
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